Hmmm. These aren't bad make-overs, not at all. I like the direction this story is pointing.
However, there are a few things I think we could make even better. I have to note, that Bradley being the father of Nicholas appeals to me greatly. There's somebody, who said she'd like to play with Pride and if we could check this up with her, I think, the upcoming conflicts could be really marvelous.
So here's what we have come up for Nicholas. Being Al's automail mechanic won't quite work, as Winry's still in the picture. But he could be a soldier instead, working close to the Mustang-tachi - if you made him a mechanic, he could have a few rounds with Fury (both human and homunculusverse). He can have a family, children and wife but 1, I won't allow any crossover. I think I know who Tomoe is and there's no need for her here. 2, the wife and children don't need a personality. They can't have alchemical talent; Al could know them and play with them sometimes but any more would push them dangerously close to developed OCs and this game excludes those. You have to concentrate on Nicholas, after all, he's your char, isn't he? ^_~
Now, he doesn't know much about his father, he never saw him; he only knows that he heroically died in some battle. That would allow a lot of angst both when he discovers there's something fishy about his father's death and when he realizes, his dad is the Führer (and a homunculus on top of that). Dante probably kept Nicholas around to have an instant candidate for the next Sin - Pride could try to lure Nicholas to Dante's side, could kidnap him, threaten him with killing his family, etc., and eventually, Nicholas could turn to a homunculus. (However, I have to say, I wouldn't let him turn back into a human if that happens. Remember, FMA isn't about happy endings.) His hatred for Dante would be still there, probably making him a valuable member of the "Light Side".
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Re: Human!Greed Presentation (Part 3)
Date: 2006-02-18 06:31 pm (UTC)However, there are a few things I think we could make even better. I have to note, that Bradley being the father of Nicholas appeals to me greatly. There's somebody, who said she'd like to play with Pride and if we could check this up with her, I think, the upcoming conflicts could be really marvelous.
So here's what we have come up for Nicholas. Being Al's automail mechanic won't quite work, as Winry's still in the picture. But he could be a soldier instead, working close to the Mustang-tachi - if you made him a mechanic, he could have a few rounds with Fury (both human and homunculusverse). He can have a family, children and wife but 1, I won't allow any crossover. I think I know who Tomoe is and there's no need for her here. 2, the wife and children don't need a personality. They can't have alchemical talent; Al could know them and play with them sometimes but any more would push them dangerously close to developed OCs and this game excludes those. You have to concentrate on Nicholas, after all, he's your char, isn't he? ^_~
Now, he doesn't know much about his father, he never saw him; he only knows that he heroically died in some battle. That would allow a lot of angst both when he discovers there's something fishy about his father's death and when he realizes, his dad is the Führer (and a homunculus on top of that). Dante probably kept Nicholas around to have an instant candidate for the next Sin - Pride could try to lure Nicholas to Dante's side, could kidnap him, threaten him with killing his family, etc., and eventually, Nicholas could turn to a homunculus. (However, I have to say, I wouldn't let him turn back into a human if that happens. Remember, FMA isn't about happy endings.) His hatred for Dante would be still there, probably making him a valuable member of the "Light Side".
What do you think?