There's a slight problem with the wording that you've choosen for Havoc who's more of a relaxed and easy going guy. Some of the words that you choose to type are very formal as English goes and Havoc isn't formal in his speech pattern at all. Thought that you might like to know. It's not meant as a criticism. It's a really good story.
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Date: 2005-09-15 01:51 pm (UTC)