fma_100 closed doors challenge_Shivers by okami_hu

[okami_hu]

Seems I missed the deadline (is it only me, or does it change from week to week...?? Oo Plus, I have no idea, why am I straining myself to write the drabbles since it's pretty obvious that nobody reads them. I should have won at least one contest this far. Ah, anyway...


Shivers (fma_100 closed doors challenge)

The door is locked – this is a prison after all.
The dark, cold cell has no windows, so Dolchet can’t see the sky. But the dog-instincts tell him, that it’s full moon.
The short soldier wants to run, to get free; he’s restless and he feels hot, his skin crawls and his head is buzzing. He paces restlessly and shivers from anger and frustration.
Finally, he falls on his knees. He can’t fight the beast sealed inside him anymore. So he raises his head and starts to howl, like a dog; behind these closed doors, maybe nobody else will hear him.

Comments

[butterfly-eli.livejournal.com]

That was great. I felt like I was inside his head, feeling his frustration. Keep writing. Yes, the challenge times do change, I think.

[okami-hu.livejournal.com]

And that's not very nice. But thank you for commenting ^^

[adalove.livejournal.com]

I think the majority of those in the community probably reads each one... I do at least. I just usually don't comment. Also, I think we've only had two (maybe three?) contests, so not much to win yet. You should write for yourself and your own enjoyment, don't worry about "winning". <3

I feel obliged to comment on the drabble, too, now. Darn you for making me stop being lazy! XD I really like the emotion and how you describe his irritation, I can definately understand the feeling.

[okami-hu.livejournal.com]

But if others are not interested in my work (read: don't comment), then why should I post...? Although, I'm happy, that I made you stop being lazy! ^^ That definitely made my day!

[the-calen.livejournal.com]

Dorchet is so left out by the fandom. I feel so bad for him, like he's trapped on 2 layers: one, in the prison, and two, that he has to repress a part of himself. ;_;

Don't worry about winning the challenges (haha I know I never will :P), but I know it's frustrating when people don't comment. It's nice to have a little recognition that you worked on it.

[okami-hu.livejournal.com]

Aww, another Doru fan! XD Oh, yeah, what you think, is quite appropriate. When he whines about "not being human anymore" I just wanna cuddle some sense into him... ^^ I wanted to express the tension, the shame he feels for submitting his animal side - I guess I got it right. Thanks for the comment! ^^

[butterfly-eli.livejournal.com]

or bugs you with "that's it?" ;) :-p love ya bean!