Thank you for the long, and constructive critique. *bows*
However there are a few things, I've wanted to address.
A captured Riza... Everyone has a breaking point, or their enemies simply kill him/her after some unsuccessful attempts. I'm tempted to write a death!fic with captured, but not-broken Riza, but I don't think it would be much success... :)
Our style, about showing and telling. I understand what you're saying, and yes, probably it's true. We didn't sit back and polished this as much as we should have and probably we won't do it in the future either, but yes, there are many parts we could rewrite. However we don't have the time, nor am I sure, it's necessary. Personally I hate to poke my stories after I've written down the -end- word and put it online, before the mass. It's a finished story, as good or bad as it can be. I try and 'undo' my mistakes in my next stories.
Reading. I read a lot, in English and in Hungarian as well, and I know okami_hu reads as well. I didn't read the books you mentioned, but I read 1984 from Orwell, and I didn't find his style good. However I'll try and check these novels out next time I'm in the library, after I finished the Ivanhoe.
Userinfo, entries, friends, and interests are the only things I can gain some information about someone I know only on livejournal. If you lie, you lie, I wouldn't know. To be blunt, I don't care. If you say you're a half-Jew-half-Gypsy mutant witch, I'll nod, and treat you like one.
As for being here... I'm here to enjoy my life and to entertain God. :) It's not like I've a real chance to be a writer/illustrator/some kind of artist.
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However there are a few things, I've wanted to address.
A captured Riza... Everyone has a breaking point, or their enemies simply kill him/her after some unsuccessful attempts. I'm tempted to write a death!fic with captured, but not-broken Riza, but I don't think it would be much success... :)
Our style, about showing and telling. I understand what you're saying, and yes, probably it's true. We didn't sit back and polished this as much as we should have and probably we won't do it in the future either, but yes, there are many parts we could rewrite. However we don't have the time, nor am I sure, it's necessary. Personally I hate to poke my stories after I've written down the -end- word and put it online, before the mass. It's a finished story, as good or bad as it can be. I try and 'undo' my mistakes in my next stories.
Reading. I read a lot, in English and in Hungarian as well, and I know
However I'll try and check these novels out next time I'm in the library, after I finished the Ivanhoe.
Userinfo, entries, friends, and interests are the only things I can gain some information about someone I know only on livejournal. If you lie, you lie, I wouldn't know. To be blunt, I don't care. If you say you're a half-Jew-half-Gypsy mutant witch, I'll nod, and treat you like one.
As for being here... I'm here to enjoy my life and to entertain God. :) It's not like I've a real chance to be a writer/illustrator/some kind of artist.