I agree that the person commenting should at least try to understand where the concept and author are coming from. Instead of thinking so fixedly that Roy could NEVER rape Riza, they should try to look at the good points of this fic.
What I think is that the storyline of this fic is fairly good, although I must admit that the author should polish up on her English (I'm talking about grammar, vocabulary, etc) and her style of writing. If you could phrase it in a way that wasn't so blunt (I'm referring to the post made by drizzling_blue) people would take a second glance at your story, to appreciate what exactly you are talking about. Description would help loads here too. I would like to point out that my English is not exactly the best in the world so I do not have the right to criticize the author as I should at least include examples on how the author could improve, but like I said, I'm not a fantastic story writer so I'm sorry if I cant help much :$.
no subject
What I think is that the storyline of this fic is fairly good, although I must admit that the author should polish up on her English (I'm talking about grammar, vocabulary, etc) and her style of writing. If you could phrase it in a way that wasn't so blunt (I'm referring to the post made by drizzling_blue) people would take a second glance at your story, to appreciate what exactly you are talking about. Description would help loads here too. I would like to point out that my English is not exactly the best in the world so I do not have the right to criticize the author as I should at least include examples on how the author could improve, but like I said, I'm not a fantastic story writer so I'm sorry if I cant help much :$.